Saturday, 17 January 2015

The Offering

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With hope in her heart, she climbed uphill to the temple that had given her solace for two long years after her daughter went missing at that very place. Walking past the familiar sights of beggars lined up along the path and hawkers selling idols, trinkets and flowers that people gave as their offering to please their deity, her eyes resumed their quest for one particular face.

A tiny girl with a tear stained face in tattered clothes walked up to her and tugged at her sari, pleading for alms. Normally she never paid heed the dirty creatures and their calls, but not today.

As a strange kind of realisation snipped off the threads of hope that had held her shattered self together she quietly placed the offering food and money meant for the lifeless idol, on the girl’s palms and proceeded downhill.



P.S- This is my first attempt at Five Sentence Fiction.




This piece of five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Offering' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
Participating in the Ultimate Blog Challenge.

10 comments:

  1. I like your five sentence section. Please write some more to share with us.

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    1. Thank you :) sure, I liked the whole idea of packing much in a few lines :)

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  2. Nicely done..so many things conveyed with so little words. Liked it :-)

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    1. Thanks a lot, I'm glad I took the plunge into FSF !

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  3. Brilliant first attempt, Vidya! The story is a parent's worst nightmare come true.

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    1. Thanks Aathira, coming from one of the fiction queens, it means a lot...very encouraging :)

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  4. Brilliant start...way to go indeed. Keep your good work on..
    P.S.: I also today for the first time attempted FSF :)

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    1. Thanks Manish! Loved yours too :) Good luck!

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